Excerpt; Would you read this book?

I LOVE it! I would definitely read it! You spend a lot of time describing her clothes and accessories! Why not try adding more detail to some other things! Maybe like, where is she in the beginning (Where is the casket being located?), when and where the will ceremony take place, and I would try to make her sound more upset (IF she is?) about her father! I REALLY like your story and I hope I helped!